Work Adjustments

Following my feedback, I have made a lot of the changes that had been commented on, on both of my print tasks.

 

This is the title on my double page spread. It used to be very simple and plain but I decided to add more colour and to create a camo effect on it to match with the theme and to brighten up the page.

 

I adjusted the colour of the introduction box to make it easier to read, as well as adding a little more detail. I changed the final line of the introduction and made it the same as the tagline of the film that is on my poster as I think this adds more intrigue and people may be more inclined to want to read on.

 

This used to be my 'update' box and it was bright purple before any changes were made. I think that the purple didn't match anything and didn't have any significance to the genre or theme of the film. I decided to change it to green and white with a camo background to link with the theme of war and to match better with my poster. I also changed the font so that it was clearer and made it smaller so that it didn't take up unecessary space on the page.

I also changed the colour of the boxes at the top of the pages to match with the rest of the features and to link better with the theme of my film. I made them smaller so they didn't draw too much attention and changed the font so that it looked more professional.

I have added a small section on the page to get the audience/readers more involved in the film itself. I have inluded a twitter and facebook address and then the logos, which also adds more colour to the page.

I changed the colour again on this quote, to match everything else that is now green on the page. I didn't like the font that I used at the start, so I have changed it to create a more hand written effect and I feel this works better with the rest of the article as it stands out more.

 

 

 

 

 

On my poster, I also added the logos of the social media websites alongside the addresses that were already present. This adds more colour to the page other than green and black, and draws the audience's attention. They logos are well known so this will also evoke interest.

One of the comments made on my feedback was to try and consider using a different colour other than green on poster. I decided that I wanted to carry the camo theme on again to link with the war style, so used a spray paint tool with different colours to achieve this.

 

 

I changed the font and used a brighter green so that the names of the actors are easier to read and I think this font looks more professional than the last one I had used.

Time Management

My main product is completely finished at this point, as are both of my ancillary tasks. However, if after feedback there are changes that can be made to improve, I will make slight changes to everything if there is time.

I am still working on adding more content to my blog about my progress, as well as the evaluation.

Work Feedback

I often get feedback from my course teacher so that I can make the necessary changes to my work to make sure I keep improving it.

Below are some images of feedback I have recieved.

This is some feedback I recieved about my most recent draft of my double page spread. This shows that up to this point, I have quite a low grade so I will take all of the comments on board and make sure that I make enough changes to build up my grade.

She has said that I need to left align the columns and the kicker in my texts. It would be better if I was a little more brief in the image captions, so that I don't give too much information away about the narrative. The rest of the comments are based on alignment and sizing of different parts of the article. I'll be sure to make all of these changes in order for it to look more realistic and professional.

  

This was a feedback sheet that I was given about my short film. I am to review the use of hand held camera shots and pans as at some points they appear to be a little bit shaky. The scene where the characters are outdoors is too dark so I may need to refilm. However, given certain circumstances with my actors, I am not able to refilm so I will have to use some editing tools on the software in order to brighten up the colour and lighting as best I can. It was also commented that the opening scene could benefit from being a little bit shorter as it appears to go on for a very long time. Again, I will make sure I take these comments on board and make necessary changes.

 

 

After the above feedback sheet for my double page spread, I immediately made the changes that were put forward. After I had done so, I emailed my teacher personally and asked if she thought I had improved and advice on what else I could do to make it better. This was really helpful as I am now able to make the three changes she mentioned in the email to make the product as good as I can.

 

 

 This is another feedback sheet that I recieved, this time about my poster. She said that the quality of the image was very good, as was the integration of text and language. She commented that I have a good understanding of conventions.

There are still areas to improve, however. The changes I need to make are: use a different colour other than green as it is not clear what this colour signifies. So, I would like to include some more colours to create an army/camo effect, especially on the title font. The rest of the comments again are about the alignment and sizing of things and to make necessary adjustments to some positionings of things. She also advised that I include some social media logos to go with the text I have included. I will make sure I consider all of these comments and follow the teachers advice as best I can to make sure my work improves.

Latest drafts

These are my latest drafts of my products: 

 

Overall, my poster reflects a drama genre, with the dark colour scheme and facial expression of the actress. I have kept a black and green colour scheme to hint at the camp/army theme, with a contrast to the white wedding dress. I have kept very little information on the poster because I wanted it to be mysterious and left to the audience's own interpretation. I kept a lot of common poster conventions, like the credit box on the bottom and the title of the movie being the largest font, as well as a tagline, the two main actors names and a quote from a well know and well respected newspaper. I feel that the poster would benefit from a change in font for the actors names, brightening up the colour of them and I would like to consider a change of layout or position of the information of the bottom. I'm considering including the logos of Facebook and Twitter to put alongside the addresses on the bottom. I think I will also brighten up the title a little bit by making the colour closer to camouflage, which will also hint at the narrative more. 

My double page spread article is also almost complete. I have kept a purple and white colour scheme because I thought they went well together and the purple is attractive and eye catching. However, I feel that I should probably change it to a better fitting colour, like greens and browns that will highlight the war theme.  I was researching what articles in film magazines commonly looked like and I decided to similarly have a mixture of images from scenes in the film, but also a photoshopped image of the main character. I have captioned all of the images, to make sure the readers understand what is going on in them. The opening paragraph explains what the film is about, which I found was common in a lot of review articles. I have also included an 'Update' box, which gives the reader the general information about the film, like who is starring in it and the production company etc. I think I should probably look into the size of the text and the box of my update section as it could be a little bit too big. Also, I want to change some of the fonts to make them look more professional and make the box at each top corner a little bit smaller. 

CHOOSING FONTS

I went through a process of choosing which fonts I wanted to use on my poster and magazine. Here are a few that I was deciding between at the start:

These were all fonts picked from dafont.com, however in the end I decided on this font: 

 

and I decided that it looked better and suited the army/camo style if it were in a dark green colour. 

For the credit box on the bottom of my poster, I used this font: 

It has the titles of the crew already formatted to each letter, which helped me to include all of the necessary roles that would be in a professional film. 

Below is an example of every other font I have used either on my poster or on my double page spread article:

I used this because it is simple and easy to read, and will look better on my work, rather than having lots of different artistic fonts. 

I used this font for the title of my magazine and for the update title box on my article page. It is bold and eye catching and easy to read, so that is what I chose it. 

I used this font for the title "Reviews" because I wanted it to contrast with the rest of the text, especially the titles. I wanted it to look almost hand written, to make it interesting and creative. 

Every other font are simple and easy to read because I didn't want a font to take away from what the text was saying, like the actual article itself on my double page spread. 

Final Draft of dps text

This is the final piece of text that I have written for my article. I have adjusted it quite a bit to make sure that it is full finished and looks professional before I add it to my work. This will be the last changes that I make on it.

 

An emotional tale of real heartbreak and sorrow; the film chronicles the life of a young woman, whose life is turned upside down when she learns that her soon-to-be husband has been taken away from her for good. A very brave choice of plot as it is something that affects the lives of many and any unrealistic element could cost the film its success.

At first glance, some would say that it’s just one of those cheesy, cliché rom-coms where the man goes off the war and the woman is left on her own. The kind of film you would associate with the likes of Dear John and even The Notebook. But when looked at closer, it is quite a convincing and emotional love story.

Grace Smith, conveyed by actress Gemma Graham, is an example of the suffering of many women. Graham stated: “I worked hard to get it right. I didn’t want to overdo it, but I wanted to convey the emotion the way it should be. I wanted to do it justice.” Acted flawlessly, Graham did an excellent job.

Don’t be expecting a detailed script to guide you through the story, because that is the complete opposite of what you are presented with. . On paper, that seems unusual and you might start to think that it will be a task to follow along without speech from the characters. . But the acting from both Gemma Graham and Antonio Townsend, along with the nicely fitting choice of instrumental music, tells as much of a good story as a script would. In fact, the lack of speech makes the ending scene so much more emotional and effective.  

Set a small city in the north east of England, in your average neighbourhood, Bombshell is an eye opening experience that shouldn’t be missed. As close as it is to becoming somewhat cliché, the director pulls it back with good cinematic choices.

The scene to look out for in particular is near the end, where Smith finds herself alone in her bedroom she would share with her fiancé. The flashback cuts forwards and backwards from the bedroom to their wedding proposal adds to the intensity of the emotion and we as an audience are invited to feel more sympathetic as her fairy tale-like love story has come to a tragic end.

 

Magazine Article- Progress

As I was working on my auxiliary tasks, I took print screens every time I added something particularly important and any changes that were made. 

Here, I have added a title and a box containing information about the film, as I saw something similar in a magazine called Empire, which is a film magazine. I have added two photographs, to give the audience an glimpse of what to expect in the film and a title and page numbers. In the purple boxes at the top of the pages, I am going to add text. 

This is a print screen of a little bit later, after I had done a little bit more work to it. I have added the magazine title and the title of the page in one purple box, and in the other I have added some information about what is on the opposite page. I've included small details like captions, and lines under text, as well as putting in a photograph of the main character, which will be surrounded by text once my article is put on.

Here is the way my article currently looks. I have added the full written article, in columns, added a quote within the text, which is a common convention of a magazine article. I used the same coloured font for the opening paragraph as this quote, and it explains to the audience what the film is about.