Script feedback from teacher and peers

I got some feedback on my script from my teacher and also from a friend. Both gave me advice on how to improve my script and different ideas and directions to consider when filming:

There were two pages of my script that contained feedback. I had a one to one with the teacher for extra feedback and advice where we considered the idea of using a voiceover from the male actor throughout rather than it being silent with instrumental music.

The feedback from my friend was:
1. Remember to use characters names when they are first mentioned
2. Give extra detail (e.g. What the photo is) just for reference when finding/using props
3. Think of appropriate shot types